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Elephants never forget I count sheep. All day, all night. I count them because I can't sleep. My glossy, plastic eyes are are always open. I stare at you with ...

Thanks for the comments everyone. I wasn't really planning to do anything with this one but its still nice to know what people think. You all have some really good ...

Ha, ha! I love it! Simple, witty, funny and brilliant! Exxccceeleennt job! :wink:

I really like this. Its short and simple, but has a good format and flows nicely. I like it because it seems like it has a lot of different meanings ...

Oh, please continue this! I was hooked right until the end! Your descriptions are so clear and simple, I could picture every detail so well. You have a great beginning. ...

I really like this! Its sweet, entertaining and fun. I only found one mistake: Next, she is massaging my droopy ears and scratches under my collar. There is a tense ...

I'm not really sure if this is the right place for this but... This is something I wrote a few years ago, originally it was a short song, It's not ...

I think that the writing in this is really good, but I also agree that it needs something more. More conflict or struggle that is harder for the character to ...

I thought that this was simply (well not so simply really) but beautiful. The last two lines were my favorite. Throughout the whole thing you use all these big words ...

I really like the idea of this, but there are a few problems. First off, throughout the entire story, you continue to switch back and forth between present and past ...

Thank you! I might just do that (ask for help I mean), it would be nice to have a second opinion (if you wouldn't mind?) I'll PM you if I ...

Hi. Can anyone tell me how and where to post a contest? And what info needs to be included? And anything else I might need to know about it? I ...

First of all, you need to seperate out your stanzas, it will make it flow better as well as be easier for the reader to read. Second "i" is always ...

Ok... Here's the second chapter. I don't think its nearly as good s the first and will probably change it later. I've just decided to title this 'The Cherry Tree' ...

yes, thats what I meant. Instead of: She is Naraida, the little fairy orphan who is the protagonist from Olivia’s story. You could just say: She is Naraida, the little ...